Me and my class have been using a cool site called telescopic text. You write a really boring sentence and transform it to a descriptive text.Telescopic text.
Hi Solly, its Charlie, you have a really good piece of writing because you have lots of good words like "immense" and "majestically" and words like that, and I think that is really good because they are describing words. The one thing I think you should work on is to make your story make more sense and otherwise it was really good. Check out my blog, to do that copy this http://odscharlieg.blogspot.co.nz/ Blog you later. Charlie.
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Hi Solly, its Charlie, you have a really good piece of writing because you have lots of good words like "immense" and "majestically" and words like that, and I think that is really good because they are describing words. The one thing I think you should work on is to make your story make more sense and otherwise it was really good. Check out my blog, to do that copy this http://odscharlieg.blogspot.co.nz/
ReplyDeleteBlog you later. Charlie.